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Posted on Wednesday, October 31 @ 23:37:39 EDT
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"The Luminence Fragile" by HeartOfSorrows
i lay here, on the stone cold floor.. gazing at the sky.. through a dismantled torn roof... the stars reflecting their light on my face.. turning it to a luminescent.. glow of white... the stars.. are so beautiful.. they seem so close to me right now.. as if i could just reach up..to the pale night sky.. and the sparkling crystal would float down and land on the rough texture of my palms... if it really did.. i dont think i could keep my gaze off of the beautiful jewel... it would lay there.. looking.. innocent.. gorgeous.... i wouldn't dare clasp my hand upon it.. for i fear i would shatter the tiny..gem... fear that it would fade away...
not really poetry.... but i liked it.... i might add to it.... i would like to hear your comments also.. it helps me develop my poetry/stories .. thanks
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