Written by Thunder
Bitter
a love gone bad.

Written by Thunder
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when i reached the end of this, i wanted more! you had me intrigued and i wanted to read more about it. the word choice wa

Written by Thunder
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i can see that i have been away too long. the visions this creates for me is just wonderful!

Written by Thunder
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when i originally read this, i thought of a woman who was able to tantilize you.. but then i thought of words and the love o

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i read this and right now i am thinking of my current life path. i am at a point in my relationship where i want the plasti

Written by ryanofarc
lsflsjdlkfjslf
fuck. it didn't format properly.

Written by Half Penny
hm
kinda blurry and choppy. loved the beginning sentence

Written by Half Penny
yes!
love it! this is a poem

Written by bloodmagician
nice
effective scheme, i enjoyed reading your little love poem. good work:)

Written by bloodmagician
I like your form
i enjoyed reading your poem as it has good structure and a simple rhyme scheme that matches what your describing. the similes

Written by Shatfield
gjhfchvhjgv
don't get it.

Written by Shatfield
Bla
err yeah. i think i did one like this. but it was pretty crap. i got bored halfway through trying to figure out a pattern in

Written by Half Penny
markov chain?
definitely had like a beating feel to it. i like

Written by Half Penny
translated?
first of all, this looks like it's gone through a translator engine...which makes it less appealing for the reader to finish

Written by CHOOCHOOtrain
thanks
oh i dont take offense at all i think i was really fucked up when i submitted this poem, and yes me needs to be dropped tha

Written by the_fool
hmmm...
a little vague at the poem part, lot of pain thouhg. and you at least did your reasearch!

Written by the_fool
i'll finish it....
he pumps and pumps, nostalgia draining his brain, throbbing in his hands. he climaxes on little debbies face and her sweet c

Written by the_fool
oops
my bad on the paragraphs critique, forgot this site formats kinda weird. sorry, you paragraph form is immaculate.

Written by the_fool
whoa whoa whoa
geez, man. paragraphs. seperate the ideas. you just jumped from one thing to the next, like three or four really short sto

Written by the_fool
AAHAA!!!
shrooming??? am i right?? all good.